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breathing in the cigarette
            smoke, your hands around my
                        waist, oh what we have, it’s a
                                    kingdom, blurred at the edges like a
                                                dream.
it’s easy to count our haves and
            have-nots, but I’d rather not and just spend
                        time, standing here with you like a
                                    schoolgirl, fantasizing at the
                                                window.
because in the end
            everything, all in my
                        life, just blurs together like
                                     droplets, droplets of rain on fogged
                                                 glass.
stay with me, I beg of
            you, you’re what gives me my
                        glow, oh good no need for my
                                    pleas, I like how you keep your
                                                promise.
because words of everlasting love mean
            nothing, they’re just the poison of emotion if they’re only
                        words, but you’ll stand with your hands at my
                                    waist, with you in boxers and me in sheer
                                                silk.
©2008-2009 ~Sidonia
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Author's Comments

Part personal, part imagination. Please critique! :O

Note: Yes, I realize this is the second time this was put up here. Let's just say I deleted the first one on a whim that was later regretted. *shrug* As for a title... well, it has one, but I'm open to suggestions. :)


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:iconkasyr:
"oh what we have, it’s a
kingdom, blurred at the edges like a
dream."

"because words of everlasting love mean
nothing, they’re just the poison of emotion if they’re only
words, "
>.> I adore these parts. I in fact would now like to write something, or redo some of my own pieces due to having read this.

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Mad as a Hatter, With twice the Chatter.

~Malice-Dono
:iconsidonia:
Yay. You finally got to meh. ;) Thanks so much for the comment, hun. :heart: I'm glad you liked it.

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"Well behaved women rarely make history." ~ Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
:iconkasyr:
<3 It was rather lovely. I don't see why you delled eet.

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Mad as a Hatter, With twice the Chatter.

~Malice-Dono
:iconjesslynxatticus:
Ooh, I adore this, hun! I -love- the last (stanza?). A title... Could be "Love's Proof" or something. I just like how you're saying that people can rattle off how they love someone, but they're just that: Pretty words that are nice to hear. But in someone's embrace, if it's true love, you feel it. (Least, that's what I got from it; I loved the message). ^^ <3

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"Were it not for this deep, passionate purpose that burns my soul every day and erodes my mind, ceasing to end until I fulfill it, then yes… I would not live. Without me, it would have no one to drive to the brink of insanity." -- My character, Jaidin.
:iconlancedclaws:
Analysis of life and love is one of the finer points that makes some of the best poems if literarily abused right.

Though with two reoccurring poems and such sensual fire...you're ruining your visage! XD Work onward!
:iconsidonia:
Ooh, I like that title idea, or at least something like it. *think, think, thinks* Hmmm.... We shall see.

Thanks so much for the comment, hun. I'm so glad you liked it! :heart:

--
"Well behaved women rarely make history." ~ Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
:iconsidonia:
Hee, thanks so much. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :) :heart:

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"Well behaved women rarely make history." ~ Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
:iconwellwornwings:
this is quite beautiful!

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"i'm the one who reached for love and missed"
:iconsidonia:
Thank you very much! : )
I'm glad you liked it. :heart:

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"Well behaved women rarely make history." ~ Laurel Thatcher Ulrich

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